The first full paragraph of Planet of Twilight

One of his fellow crewmembers on the New Republic escort cruiser Adamantine found him slumped across the table in the deck-nine break room, where he’d repaired half an hour previously for a cup of coffeine. Twenty minutes after Barak should have been back to post, Gunnery Sergeant Gallie Wover went looking for him, exasperatedly certain that he’d clicked into the infolog banks “just to see if anybody mentions the mission.”

HOW DID SOMEONE GET PAID TO WRITE THIS SHIT?

1. Repaired. This isn't some novel of manners (I guess it could be if Leia showed up), repaired means fixed something, not went somewhere. (Adler would yell about coming to terms.)

2. he’d clicked into the infolog banks “just to see if anybody mentions the mission."

 That's not an English sentence. I have no idea what that means. Is it saying that he started doom scrolling looking for their own mission? Infolog sounds like it'd be a log book or something, shouldn't the mission be mentioned repeatedly? What the fuck is going on here?

I read the rest of chapter one last night. It hasn't gotten much better. Seriously, is this going to be worse than Children of the Jedi? How is that possible? How did Hambly get hired for a second book? Does her non-Star Wars stuff suck less?

I'm going to try to soldier on (I've got a cold, so there's a lot of lying in bed reading on the calendar), but this might be the first official tap out.

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